can't get over you poetryCan you give me your humble opinion on my tacky love poetry?

I wrote this a year ago after I lost my first girlfriend.
Before you read this, you need to know a poem she wrote me to get the context:

Love
is it a mistake?
or a valid excuse
to mess with another's mind?

will you be my mistake?
my excuse?
most importantly
will you be my love?
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Ok, so here's mine:

Pathetic

Light faint,
From a distant lamp, the only radiance I sense
I write this…
I think of you tonight
Every night
Dreaming that I could go back
To fix my blunders,
Mistakes that left me with my rotting heart.
I cling to my dearest memories.
Wanting,
Wishing,
Lusting to have you back in my arms.
Only tears satisfy my misery.
Eyes throbbing,
Struggling against the urge to grieve,
I write this…
Never will I let you go,
Nor will I stop loving you with all of my passion.
I am that pathetic.
I am so pitiful I simply cannot let you go.
As I devote myself to you,
I realize how worthless I am.
Desperately, I have made hopeless efforts tcan't get over you poetryo find somebody else.
Every time ‘round this circle,
I feel every girl is a helpless strive to replace you.
I will always remember
The silence of your sweet murmur…
“I saw it coming…”

I am selfish.
I am a heartbreaker,
An as*hole,
But your as*hole.
The as*hole that woke up
With you in his thoughts,
The as*hole that stared into
Your eyes
Who could stare,
Like a stalker,
For hours,
Into your soul.
The as*hole that read
Your tacky poetry
Who wept over it
Over the thought
Of you in his arms
In his heart
His broken heart
Shattered
Tiny pieces like sand
Make glass
Red glass
Love glass,
Because love is red
Love
My mistake
Your mistake
My excuse
Your excuse
Our love
Our friendship
Our first teenage emotion
In your room
On your bed
With the lights off
On you
No glow in the dark stars
Except in your eyes
The deep caramel of your eyes
Deep starry caramel glowing in the dark
The dark of innocence
Where eyes flutter shut
For no reason to keep them open.
In your dark room
With watermelon lip glocan't get over you poetryss
And a movie
And a bed
And a light that is out at the moment
That particular moment in time
Our time of simplicity
You go be in my arms and we’ll be happy.

I still love you.
I know I’m not pathetic.
Stop saying I am.
I will always love you.
I’m pathetic.
Stop telling me.
I’ve never loved anyone like you.
I’m not pathetic.
But I can’t get over you.
Get over it.
I can’t move on.
If you want it so bad
Give me a push.
Help me up.
Don’t abandon me.
<3

I still love you <3
Time to move on…
I hope you’re happy…
With him…
I loved it! Yes it is quite long but the detail in everything kept me interested. I could imagine someone on stage reciting it! I just loved it.
super lame....

maybe a little pathetic.... but then again if you didnt have dick cancer maybe your girl wouldn't have left :)

kinda like beating a dead horse, and then wasting my life with the details. entirely too long. good title.